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Post by Navera Sat Oct 08, 2016 1:55 pm

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Name: Konchū
Sub-race?: N/A
Body-Type: Humanoid
General Alignment: Lawful Evil
Average Size: Average
Base Mana: 300
General Appearance: Konchū have ovipositors that emerge from their backs, as well as wings that are in likeliness to dragonflies only much large with a wingspan of 3ft, all of which can be used effectively in combat as well as to stand upon. Furthermore, women of this race have yellow or orange skin and feelers on their heads that look similar to dreadlock hair ranging from black to brown and have an average height of 5'8 - 5'10, weighing on average 140lbs. Males of this race have brown or red skin and have bald heads and have an average height of 5'10 - 6'5, weighing on average 190lbs.
Traits:

  • Stat Changes - +5 to perception and reaction time. -5 arcana and mysticism


  • Advantages - Due to their enslavement, Konchū have plentiful knowledge in weapon smithing from long horrendous hours in the forges, thus starting out with Weapon Smith: Rank 2: 2 points and have a -10% less word count in order to train it. Their eyes are also highly sensitive and they have an acute sense of danger so their perception and reaction time is better than most.

    Special Abilities:

  • Weaknesses - However due to their less than desirable means of living, Konchū cannot begin with magic and require +10% more word count in order to train it.


History: The Konchū are a sentient race of colonial, insect-like humanoids from the island realm of Arnyek, a realm that was conquered by Kaydia under the 12th Chief of Tribes due to not having any defense against outsiders. Konchū grow from the form of maggot-like larvae inside of victims' bodies, emerging with wings in a humanoid form from them as if they were a cocoon, at times within seconds of their implantation. The stronger the host of the Konchū maggots, the stronger the resultant Konchū will be, with, as an example, Konchū emerging from one of the Elder Gods being nigh unstoppable. However with majority of the Konchū under enslavement, strong Konchū are hard to come by.

Almost all information known on the Konchū is from a single female specimen, making knowledge of a male version, if it exists, difficult to come by or at least legends says since the males are typically under subjugation by the females and have a lower birth rate.

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Last edited by Navera on Sat Oct 08, 2016 5:01 pm; edited 2 times in total
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Post by Aphyra Sat Oct 08, 2016 4:26 pm

Navera wrote:
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Name: Konchū
Sub-race?:
Okay, so instead of a long line just use the code
Code:
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Also, please list either N/A, or No, or yes (if yes list what race it's a sub race of) for sub-race.

Navera wrote:
General Appearance: Konchū have a readily available slit at the abdomen level. Konchū also have four poisonous ovipositors that emerge from their backs, as well as the aforementioned wings, all of which can be used effectively in combat as well as to stand upon. Furthermore, women of this race have yellow or orange skin and feelers on their heads that look similar to dreadlock hair ranging from black to brown and have an average height of 5'8 - 5'10, weighing on average 140lbs. Males of this race have brown or red skin and have bald heads and have an average height of 5'10 - 6'5, weighing on average 190lbs.
Traits:

  • Stat Changes - +5 to perception, reaction time, and speed. -5  strength, physique, and mysticism


  • Advantages - Due to their enslavement, Konchū have plentiful knowledge in weaponsmithing from long horrendous hours in the forges, thus starting out with Weapon Smith: Rank 2: 2 points.


  • Weaknesses - However due to their less than desirable means of living, Konchū cannot begin with magic and require +10% more word count in order to train it.


okay, so first, i have no idea what "a slit in the abdomen" is, or what purpose it serves. Additionally, with the posion egg organs? what's that about. Also wings are going to need more explanation, also you never mentioned them before that time.

Next its important to note, that both Physique and Reaction time are average stats. So if you want to increase those you should directly increase the stats that effect them. Not saying you can't directly upgrade them, but i'm saying what you might want to do.

Advantages are fine.

disadvantages are fine.
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Post by Navera Sat Oct 08, 2016 5:03 pm

Edits Made. Explain about stats. Took out poison and slit in the abdomen and the wings come from them being humanoid insects.
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